Caligula's Launderette

I should probably sleeping, but sleep is overrated. I love this, and it shows a depth of caring :D for your sister. There are a few hiccups on the flow, ...

Beautiful and breathtaking, the blackness of the maw, her power leaves me quaking, she leaves everyone in awe. I bow humbly to this first stanza and its rhyme. :) They ...

Hugs! Snoink, you updated! yay! and like the Campbell's soup commericals - Mmm Mmm Good. I actually tried to sleep, and couldn't so I thought I'd read. I love the ...

Oh. My. Goddess. W. T. F? Texas Instruments... I don't think I can think anymore - I draw a blank - quedado un blanco... all that's there is someone in ...

*whistles lowly* now that's a hook, line, and sinker... only a few nitpicks - The man standing in one corner was barely visible; the light was so dim here. - ...

It reads so well, and I love the allusions of the last stanza. I don't have much to say except it made me think, and think in a good way. ...

hehheh... reminds me of the crazy monologue. I like the POV how it is :D, a bit Schizo for the best. My favorite line would be - That hurts like ...

Firstly - Do the Punc! As Bob would say. Secondly - my crit - so here we go - Fire tongues leave black scraps In it’s weary wake - I ...

Yes Kay, Truro is a real place. More exposure, agreed. I just finished reading it once-over, but I've got stuff on the stove, so I'll post my crit later. First ...

Oh, lovely rhyme scheme. I agree with Ari, so I'm not going to repeat what she said by typing it here. Nice poem, but it needs a little cleanup on ...

Oooo...creepy.... More? typos - Psycology should be Psychology Ut was hard to walk by Stacy’s door on the way home, where they had drunk hot cocoa and shared secrets. It ...

DaVinci Code was okay, nice break from the heavy Chaucer I was reading for class. I have to agree with smaur on the gimmicks and such. Also, I think people ...

Hmmm... I like the rhyme and the simplicity. Structurally too many commas methinks, maybe - Fragrance beauty: tender red, in lines 3-5 because of the run-on it is hard to ...

Lovely little piece here, I love the parrellel between your words and the Abby's fear. As for the 'always dark, never dawn' question, I have a few theories brewing in ...

You've got my attention... very subtle at the end m'dear. I have to disagree with Poor_Imp on the usage of 'Aye'. Althought it is a very nautical term, it is ...